Integration

Locke · 07-31-2013, 07:51 PM

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Originally Posted by guncannon109

Yeah, that could be an issue...

I Just read the first little bit of it and I would recommend backing up a little bit to establish who the characters are, where the story takes place and what's going on before getting into the meat of things. Take for example in my Xtreme series, I start of with a big "WTF" moment with only two lines of dialogue, and then back up a bit to establish who the main character is and a bit of the supporting cast. Hell, Xtreme doesn't even transform for the first time until near the end... Just a bit of advice, other than that it looks pretty good.

I thought I'd start it in the action, then pick up the story in the second episode, that way they can quickly get what the Rider is about and come back to find out what the show is about.

07-31-2013, 07:51 PM	#66
Locke Big Bad Wolf. Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Raiding tombs. Posts: 9,562	Quote: Originally Posted by guncannon109 Yeah, that could be an issue... I Just read the first little bit of it and I would recommend backing up a little bit to establish who the characters are, where the story takes place and what's going on before getting into the meat of things. Take for example in my Xtreme series, I start of with a big "WTF" moment with only two lines of dialogue, and then back up a bit to establish who the main character is and a bit of the supporting cast. Hell, Xtreme doesn't even transform for the first time until near the end... Just a bit of advice, other than that it looks pretty good. I thought I'd start it in the action, then pick up the story in the second episode, that way they can quickly get what the Rider is about and come back to find out what the show is about. __________________