[Darth Kalacius]

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Originally Posted by Mesnick

Very interesting and you are heading in the right direction. Of course, it?s difficult to judge from a textual retelling, but the most important thing, in my opinion, is in your version:
- George comes to the role of the villain more gradually and does not look like an appendix from the draft;
- Giff is a truly difficult and strong opponent;
- Igarashi's interactions with their demons are given more emphasis and are more personal.
- Well, Daiji isn?t annoying either
If criticism is needed, maybe Orteca's role in the show's finale should be expanded? It always seemed strange to me that he was actually resurrected and none of the post-content convinced me that this was really necessary.

Thanks man, I'm really appreciated it! About Orteca, I was thinking keeping him as same as TV, and also he would has some lines like mocking everyone and making everyone feeling hopeless and not able to stop Ikki. I think he will be like a nuisance to everyone. I also hint him planning to escape to foreshadows Juuga Vs Orteca.
Anything else you found in? Feel free to ask it, thanks!

Edit: I would also to make clear that Hikaru's mom died fighting Giff's army during George's madness, he challenges the heroes and even Giff, so the battle was getting intensed. Hikaru's dad being killed by Akaishi, almost same as TV, but removes the picture things, he just said at least he can joins his family for now. This makes Hikaru grows more as a person, he also gets guidance from Hiromi, Sakura, Tamaki and Ikki. He will managed to get some Demon Troopers to side on and later joins Ikki. The moment Genta defeats Vail is the sign that everyone joins Ikki's side.