[Locke]

I've literally been writing solidly for the last like four hours and finished up the first chapter of my new Rider idea. Hope you guys enjoy.

[guncannon109]

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Originally Posted by Locke

I've literally been writing solidly for the last like four hours and finished up the first chapter of my new Rider idea. Hope you guys enjoy.

Damn... This should be good!

[Locke]

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Originally Posted by guncannon109

Damn... This should be good!

Or maybe awful because I stormed it

[guncannon109]

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Originally Posted by Locke

Or maybe awful because I stormed it

Yeah, that could be an issue...

I Just read the first little bit of it and I would recommend backing up a little bit to establish who the characters are, where the story takes place and what's going on before getting into the meat of things. Take for example in my Xtreme series, I start of with a big "WTF" moment with only two lines of dialogue, and then back up a bit to establish who the main character is and a bit of the supporting cast. Hell, Xtreme doesn't even transform for the first time until near the end... Just a bit of advice, other than that it looks pretty good.

[KamenRiderOOO]

Going to finish Access 21 for ModRanger tonight, and start writing the first part of "Kamen Rider X Kamen Rider- Xtreme X Magica: Movie Taisen Zeta", Magica's segment, "The Resonant Phantoms."

[Locke]

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Originally Posted by guncannon109

Yeah, that could be an issue...

I Just read the first little bit of it and I would recommend backing up a little bit to establish who the characters are, where the story takes place and what's going on before getting into the meat of things. Take for example in my Xtreme series, I start of with a big "WTF" moment with only two lines of dialogue, and then back up a bit to establish who the main character is and a bit of the supporting cast. Hell, Xtreme doesn't even transform for the first time until near the end... Just a bit of advice, other than that it looks pretty good.

I thought I'd start it in the action, then pick up the story in the second episode, that way they can quickly get what the Rider is about and come back to find out what the show is about.

[guncannon109]

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Originally Posted by KamenRiderOOO

Going to finish Access 21 for ModRanger tonight, and start writing the first part of "Kamen Rider X Kamen Rider- Xtreme X Magica: Movie Taisen Zeta", Magica's segment, "The Resonant Phantoms."

Replace "Access 21 for Modranger" with "Episode 9 of Xtreme" and "Magica's segment, "The Resonant Phantoms"" with "Xtreme's segment, "Mystery of Fate" and that's what I'm doing.

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Originally Posted by Locke

I thought I'd start it in the action, then pick up the story in the second episode, that way they can quickly get what the Rider is about and come back to find out what the show is about.

Alright, just giving a bit of advice is all.

[SideswipePrime]

Aside from Modranger, I've been reading Kingdom Hearts: Road to Twilight. A fanfic that's as My Little Pony X Kingdom Hearts crossover. It's really good. Sora doesn't show up, and neither do other KH characters. Twilight's Keyblade being Oathkeeper kind of bothers me. I wish the author gave Twilight her own unique Keyblade.

[Locke]

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Originally Posted by guncannon109

Alright, just giving a bit of advice is all.

And I am grateful! I just want you to know where I am at, stuff like Lily cracking the Monsters mask for example are important and will play a part in the coming episodes.

[guncannon109]

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Originally Posted by Locke

And I am grateful! I just want you to know where I am at, stuff like Lily cracking the Monsters mask for example are important and will play a part in the coming episodes.

Ah, planting the seeds of what's to come... Always a good sign.